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Patris's avatar

I couldn’t look away, Chen, from the first line to the last word, wondering at the purple mourning dress and who waits for those graves..

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

thank you, dear Patris 💕

(is purple a mourning color? I kinda have this evening visitor in a purple dress since I was a teen. I wrote the whole poem about her back then, but of course it's lost somewhere.

Interesting that it all had details of a house that I didn't and couldn't have had back then)

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Patris's avatar

Yes, my understanding is that (oddly?) it represents royalty and also grief.

I’ve dreamt of living other lives since I was a child, we have that in common. It sparks recognition sometimes when I’m at museums.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

Oh, to me it's a color of mystery

But yes, maybe not a joyful one. depends on a shade though

And-yes.

Thank you so much for the restack, dear Patris -I can't comment under the Note, what's with these people? i wrote to the big boss btw, no answer of course.

Thank you 🌹

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

Yes, purple is also a color of mystery and the occult.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

💜

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Richard Donnelly's avatar

Not sure what this is but kinda like it

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

oh thank you Richard 💫

я человек непритязательный -"что вижу, о том пою" ))

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

oh thank you so much for sharing this, dear Fotini 🪄❤️

I'm completely lost on this platform. Granted it's the easiest part of being lost at all, yet still.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

ah, and "hearts" disappear. for weeks already. "is anybody out there?"

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Portia's avatar

Your poems are like a deep, dense, dark yet not unfriendly forest, Chen. I love to lose myself in them.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

Thank you so much, dear Portia 💕

Indeed, if I'd be ..some terrain, I'd be a forest. I guess.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

and huge thank you for sharing this ✨✨✨

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

thank you so much for the restack, rena 🌹

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

thank you so much for sharing this, David 💫💫

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Larisa Rimerman's avatar

It is a brilliant ballad, dark and gloomy. I am in full admiration for your talent. But why does everything has to be so tragic?! The decoration of the scene with its scarlet Wales swimming on the pillow, a living painting, the porcelain dog stretching - all this still nature is contrasting with the alive but frozen girl in purple, tragic or at least, troubled color of poetry. And the main heroine with the bleeding hands is tired, standing in front of two graves. The ending is philosophical - "nothing ends." Circling of the beginning and end is an excellent method. Love it.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

Thank you so much! I'm really happy you love it ❤️

It doesn't have to be tragic- I actually was for once almost joyful l when I suddenly wrote it. I felt alive. Because I was writing.

Albeit still myself, so there's that.

❤️

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Larisa Rimerman's avatar

I'm very glad that you don't feel it tragic, but the reader does, at least I do, as your reader. When your heroine is preparing two graves for her lover (?) and herself and wants to kill both, how do you call this genre- tragedy, comedy? Anyway, it is very interesting action.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

Well it depends which inner state to compare to which inner state.

(edited for too much information))

Even noticing things around me-I took it as a good sign, какой-то корень дьяволовой ноги, честно.

Maybe the reader picks it up

Thank you, dear Larisa ❤️

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Mahdi Meshkatee's avatar

My heart feels for the recurring damaged girl in your words, Chen. I hope she does better as days go by, and for possibilities to always stay near.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

🩵

thank you, dear Mahdi

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

big thank you for the restack as well -can't comment under the Note again somehow 💫

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Richard Blaisdell's avatar

Early morning slyphs rise in a scene. Widows branches scrape colored reminders rummage through their hair to find a glimpse of what could have been or could be the next dream thought to happen. Mystery veils. We may never know and better than an empty grave waiting to be filled.

Taking me longer to find time to read. Ponder the words that express and suppress the emotions of solitude.

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

💙💙💙

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

big thank you for the restack, Vanechka 💫💫

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Chen Rafaeli's avatar

thank you so much for the restack, dear Paul

💙

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